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In some cultures old age people are highly valued, while in other cultures youth is more valued. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#cultures #age #people #youth
The activities that I recommended are considered based on the facts of easy access, simplicity, fun and interaction with nature and other children while focusing on development areas. Since she can ride a tricycle very well, bicycling will be the
next
 step to improve her focus, practise balance and learn directions while having fun developing her gross motor skills. She loves colouring pictures but, she could not control the pencil to draw patterns and shapes. To give sufficient fine motor simulation to her fingers, the parents can encourage her to draw the pictures by showing her how to copy the pictures in colouring books
first
. Drawing can help her control the pencil, draw patterns, and write the letters in the right direction. To enhance her cognitive and language development, her parents can make daily catch-up conversations with her during dinner or after dinner about her school activities or friends by asking open-ended questions and listening actively to her.
This
 activity not only can improve her communication and thinking process but
also
 can form a habit of sharing her activities and feelings with
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 family members while building a close relationship with them. Telling moral stories to kids is one of the best ways to teach children moral values and life lessons. It teaches a child not only moral values but
also
 good manners, social behaviours, and respect for elders. Her family members can explain the message of the story and
also
 confirm her understanding by asking questions.
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