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Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about the news. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #people #touch #news
In contemporary
society
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 social
media
 has a great influence
to
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on
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 people, including their personal and social life.
This
 essay will detail the reasons why the benefits and drawbacks are of equal importance. The positive
aspects
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aspect
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 to be in touch with your friends and acquaintances
in
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 social
media
 is that you can speak with them literally almost 24/7.
For example
, if you need something to ask emergency, but you don’t
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know
knock
knok
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know
 if the person
available
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in
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at
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this
 moment or
for
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if
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you
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it
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 will be inconvenient speak
to
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by
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phone
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the phone
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- social
media
 can help you with that.
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Another
Anothe
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Another
 reason
is
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why interactive
media
 is helpful to
learning
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learn
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 some
news
 from there
this
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these
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 days- is that
internet
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the internet
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are
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is
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 full of different fresh information on various
and
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apply
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interesting for each other topics. You have access
for
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to
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this
 information at any time of the day or night.
Conversely
, there are
obvious
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some
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negative aspects to
be
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being
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 able
speaking
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to speak
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 to people
in
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on
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 social networking and
get
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getting
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news
 from there.
Firstly
, the dialogue with someone in real life will never compare to talking online.
Moreover
,
the
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constant communication only by Instagram or Facebook can alinient people from each other.
Secondly
, not every
news
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piece of news
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in
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 Internet can be true. It means, that person can easily and often be misled by reading unverified sources. In conclusion, there are several positives
such
 as
the
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24/7 communication and a lot of interesting
news
 for everyone.
However
, the negatives should not be forgotten because of
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distances
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 from your friends and a lot of false information
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