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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crimes drams are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV show are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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In today's generation
people
 started watching Netflix there are many documentaries which are made for
people
 to watch so that they know what is happening in the world. There are many sources from
where
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people
 can gather information. Novels and Tv crimes drama are becoming very popular because in books we only read and imagine the situation, but in tv shows, they actually show us fiction and tv crimes which makes
people
to
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see more and more and get information about it. I personally feel
rather
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that rather
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reading
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than reading
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 books one should watch shows and
drama
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dramas
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 to exactly know what is happening there is
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 demand for series because
people
 love watching
actions
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action
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 and fiction
it
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which
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 makes
people
 possible to watch the series more often. In some countries,
people
 are more into novels because they love reading. There are many other popular novels based on true stories which make one understand how the world is and what all is happening in the world. It plays an important role in today's generation. It focuses on
the
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crime and makes
people
 aware
about
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of
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 it. It is
also
 useful for children to watch
such
 crime shows so that they can be aware of what is going on and
also
 make them aware of strangers and makes them mature and intelligent at the same time. The conclusion to
this
 topic is that it obviously makes
people
 understand and make them study about it but
also
 encourages
people
 to watch more and more
of
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fiction and
crimes
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crime
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 shows for their own good and help children to know what is right for them.
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