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In Western Countries people spend a lot of money on their pets. They buy special food for cats and dogs, buy them toys and often pay high fees for medical treatment. Some people think this is a waste of money and argue that pets are dirty and dangerous. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a pet? Do people spend too much money on pets?

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The two pie charts are comparing the monthly household
income
 spent in the group of persons with low
income
 and with high
income
. The highest percentage of
money
 spent
from
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by
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 people with low
income
 is
food
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on food
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 and drink. They spend 29% of their
income
for
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on
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 food and drinks, closely followed by fuel bills, which corresponds to 24%. Only 4%
are
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is
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 spent on restaurants and hotels and 5%
for
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on
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 clothing.
This
 is very different for the
high
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high-income
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income
 group. 23% of
money
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the money
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 is spent on Miscellaneous. Closely followed by 21% of recreation and culture, while only 11% of the
low
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low-income
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income
 group spend their
money
 on recreation. Only 15% of the
money
 is spent on food and drink and 7%
are
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 spent on 7%. In conclusion, it is very visible that the distribution of the
money
 spent is very different in the two different groups.
High
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income
 people are in
capacity
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the capacity
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 to spend much more of their
money
 on recreational activities.
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