The use of the mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so the mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays mobile
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are everywhere, everybody has one and spends a large amount of time looking at its screen. It is argued by some that these electronic devices can have antisocial effects, as
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is the case of smoking, and
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mobile
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should be prohibited in certain places as the policies
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the use of cigarettes. While I agree that
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can have a significant antisocial impact, it is
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true that it has a social component as well, as well as smoking. Mobile
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have become part of our
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. We take our phone everywhere we want to go and we feel anxious if we forget it at home, or even worse
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if it gets lost or damaged. These devices can influence our
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behaviour
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and people can even develop a considerable level of
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. As I said previously, I totally support the idea that
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can be antisocial, as
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certain occasions individuals can pay more attention to them than to other people around them.
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, in
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day and age mobile
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contain an array of social applications that the public use to socialize online,
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as WhatsApp, Instagram, WeChat or Facebook. As regards
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smoking, some detractors (and I include myself) would say that it is an unsocial
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, due to the fact that there
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many people who cannot stand being close to
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smoker and,
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, they would leave the room
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,
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activity could be
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considered at a certain point as social. To illustrate
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the breaks workers use to take for smoking purposes, which are
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a social situation, as they normally go with other colleagues and socialize. In conclusion, it is no doubt true that
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can be as unsocial as smoking in certain situations, but I do not think
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should be banned as
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tobacco
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, owing to
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social potential and
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importantace
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importance
in everyone's
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lifes
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • antisocial
  • social interactions
  • negative impacts
  • banning
  • regulated
  • completely banned
  • education
  • awareness campaigns
  • responsible
  • mobile phone use
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