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Nowaday, it has become common for students to take a cab year gap year between school and University.

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Recently, there are both videos of discussion on the two sides of how important enough for
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students to take a gap year before they become collegians. Even if all of the remarks may have personal reasons and some logic could be useful, I
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 think about my opinions about
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 argument; I have truly approved of the situation. Nowadays, every society is providing educational and fundamental knowledge to their population. In the same way, everyone has different attention,
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opinions and their interests,
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 is solitary to expose, explore and improve their abilities that would be of some value or occupation in their future. Unfortunately, not everyone can find their goals in life. They are still undefined about what they need to improve their value,
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 they have some soft spots for.
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, they need some personal space for consideration to determine their own way.
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taken, it would be worthwhile if they could find something they love and are ready to spend more than half their life working for it because their passion was encountered, so they were willing to commit to it for good.
However
, all of these reasons were the outcome
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 opinion. Every
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 always has some
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 and some utilities for someone that would be able to approach whatever achievement that they have been dreaming about.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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