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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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By consuming a huge amount of
junk
food
 individuals are suffering from health issues and the
number
 got increased in a few states
and
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apply
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some
people
 thought it is obligate that
governments
 should increase the amounts of
tax
 on
such
kind
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kinds
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 of
foods
. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and
this
 essay will show the sufferings of poor
people
 and the solution rather than increasing the
tax
. To commence with, if
governments
 increase taxes on fast
foods
, perhaps a
little
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few
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people
 should stop buying these
foods
, but a
lot
 of poor individuals will have to suffer a
lot
 for large amounts of taxes.
The
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People
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people
 who have a wealthy background will not stop to buy these types of
junk
foods
,
consequently
,
a
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the
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number
 of
people
 who will suffer from physical problems will not stop. Though there are a
lot
 of adolescents and younger
people
 who are recently gotten obsessed with
junk
food
, it is hard to convince them to stop
this
.
Secondly
, by taking some unavoidable steps
governments
 can stop the
number
 which is getting increased day by day.
For instance
, by making some publicity of diseases that are happening because of consuming
junk
foods
. Because of these ,
advertisements
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 some
people
 will obviously get conscious of
such
kind
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kinds
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 of health issues. Perhaps by improving the
number
 of playgrounds and playing parks as well as fitness centres it is possible to solve
this
 issue. If
people
 take any kind of
food
 but still do a
lot
 of
exercise
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exercises
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then
 it got adjusted in
our
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their
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 bodies. To conclude, I disagree with the
tax
 increment by
governments
. Increasing exercise-related centres and playgrounds for
people
’s fitness
instead
 of increasing the
tax
 on
food
 can solve
this
 problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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