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Some people argue that the government should spend money only on medical care and education but not on theatres or sports stadiums. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are argumentative statements heating up a debate over whether it is necessary for the authority to invest
money
on
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 the health care and schooling system but not
on
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theaters
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 or sports
stadiums
. While some people hold a strong view that it is crucial for the governor to do so, the opposite makes a statement that the
state
 should allocate
money
 effectively to both of them. The former is valid to some extent, meanwhile, I consider myself
as
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an advocate of the latter. Without a shadow of a doubt, covering the cost of the medical and schooling system does wonders for the
benefits
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 of inhabitants. Because there are the backbone industries for development in any country.The governors provide financial support to make education accessible to everyone and enjoy services from top-notch hospitals.
For example
, in Germany where the government pays all the tuition and hospital fees for their people in the form of social insurance.
That is
 what makes all Germans go to school and become
high- quality
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 and healthy human resources.
Therefore
, Germany has become one of the countries with the strongest economic development in Europe.
Hence
, the above two factors should be invested in by the
state
. While the essence of investing
money
 in medical care and schooling systems is widely acknowledged, it is unfair if the governors ignore funding for the entertainment industry. The
state
's focus on investment in
theaters
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 and
stadiums
 will attract many tourists, especially tourists from abroad, which will give the country many potential opportunities for development. economically and culturally.
For instance
,
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Korea- one of the 3 countries that are considered
as
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Asian dragons have invested a lot in their KPOP culture. They organize concerts for famous artists in major
stadiums
 in their country, which not only promotes their artists and music, it
also
 helps guests to know the place in that city. Thanks to those concerts, Korea attracts millions of visitors every year and they are very developed economically.
Hence
, it is indispensable for the
state
 to invest
money
 in the entertainment industry. From my perspective,it is paramount significant for the government to provide financial support for the medical and schooling system but they should invest more in
theaters
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 and
sport
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stadiums
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government expenditure
  • public health
  • medical facilities
  • access to healthcare
  • education system
  • quality education
  • human capital
  • economic growth
  • luxury
  • cultural development
  • social development
  • tourism
  • local economy
  • well-rounded society
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