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Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about the news. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays social networks play an essential role in
everyday
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 life of people. While some claim there is a negative side
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 their usage which might lead to far-going consequences, others believe that
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 of using media apps clearly dominate over the drawbacks. What might be regarded as an explicit downside of social media is that it has an enormous impact on society, the young generation
in particular
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 There is a lot of forbidden content on the Internet,
such
 as cruel photos and videos and films with age restrictions to which teenagers may get access simply by cheating the system.
Such
 things might influence the yet unformed
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 of teens and cause certain traumas which in future might be the reason for uncontrollable aggression. Another drawback of using social networks is that lately too many swindlers have appeared online who present themselves as real people and beg for money, allegedly either they or their family member has a serious disease and need monetary aid.
As a result
, there are thousands of deceived users worldwide. Turning to the positive aspects of using social media apps, it should be mentioned that with their appearance people became closer to one another. Now there is an excellent opportunity to get in touch with family and friends, no matter in what corner of the planet one is. There is no need anymore to wait for vacations once a year to see or hear the loved ones. Another benefit is that social platforms provide an opportunity of being aware of what is going on in the world and useful information,
for example
: what concerts or activities are being held in
this
 or that city or where to buy a bargain ticket in order to save money. What is more, social networks are a perfect place to make a name. By posting thematic pictures with valuable
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, unique photos of nature or
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 images of handmade craft one might create a successful business and
therefore
, attract potential consumers. Summarizing the main point, the advantages prevail over the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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