Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about the news. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

When
people
talk about social
networks
, they need to understand that these applications and sites are the most popular.
People
get most of the news,
important
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and important
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events or just communicate with each other from there,social
networks
have a huge number of advantages and opportunities to spend time in them.
For instance
, to communicate, let's say someone
don't
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have a person's phone number or there are times when
people
with similar interests start to communicate social
networks
help to remove barriers to communication,
maybe
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and maybe
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in the future they will become friends in real
life
or even family,
also
social
networks
can
helps
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follow the news in the world. Social
networks
are a part of modern
life
and a very important part. But at the same time, social
networks
have disadvantages,
for example
, anyone can spend a lot of time on social
networks
, but there is always a limit,
otherwise
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a person can stop communicating in real
life
, health can deteriorate sharply,
people
should always remember that social
networks
are cool but don't forget real
life
.But , the biggest problem is the propaganda of smoking, support for certain political movements,
suicide
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and suicide
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,all
this
is just terrible, but the problem is that it is almost impossible to control how many admins and moderators today have not come up with how it is
completely
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control
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. After analyzing everything previously said, it can be concluded that the drawbacks mean more benefits
,
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because
it
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obvious that not a single benefit can outweigh the threat to human
life
.
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