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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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In the modern world, many countries have a common challenge associated with traffic congestion, so government should impose a new
tax
 rate for
car
 owners which is heavier than the
last
 one and
then
 transform all these taxes to invest in better public transportation in cities. In
this
 ,essay we will explain both benefits and drawbacks of these measures.
To begin
 with, increasing
tax
 for a private
car
 can justify for two main reasons.
Firstly
, decreasing in the number of vehicles because the price of that consists of
tax
. And
this
 method can make
people
 not want to purchase it, by doing
this
 the number of cars on the road declining automatically. Another point is rising in the usage of public transport owning to they are cheaper than having a
car
 and
also
 more convenient. ,
Moreover
Add a comma
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 if citizens in the city switch to using public transport
such
 as buses, and sky trains they will reduce the emission of gas produced by cars. On top of that, society can have good air quality and a healthy ecosystem,
therefore
 burdens of hospitals and doctors plummet too.
On the other hand
, life in a rural area without a
car
 is a major challenge for rural dwellers.
Firstly
, they are limited public transport which is not cover all the areas.
Secondly
, in , the countryside the journey is longer than in cities, so
people
 can not travel without an automobile.
Furthermore
, imposing heavy
tax
-related inequality issues.
Consequently
, normal
people
 with normal income can not afford it only rich
people
 who can pay high taxes can it buy. In conclusion, the
car
tax
 launched by the government are having both advantages of ameliorating traffic trouble and environmental trouble and disadvantages associated with the gap between rich
people
 and poor
people
 in the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Emissions
  • Revenue generation
  • Public dissatisfaction
  • Political issues
  • Financial burden
  • Environmental benefits
  • Efficiency and accessibility
  • Taxation
  • Heavily taxing
  • Private car owners
  • Fund improvements
  • Discourage the use
  • Healthier environment
  • Public transport quality
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