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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
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While some
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 consider that
students
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 in college are able to learn the subject in which they are interested, others hold the view that they should learn some knowledge which is useful and beneficial to society as well. Personally, I believe that everyone should be able to study the course of their choice. There are various reasons why
people
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 believe that universities should only offer
subjects
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 that will be useful in the future.
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,
people
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 may assert that some
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 like science, medicine, and engineering are more likely to be beneficial than certain art degrees. From a personal perspective,
students
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 can seek a promising job and
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 earn better salaries if they have learnt the aforementioned
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 and relevant knowledge. On the social level, by forcing
people
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 to choose particular college
subjects
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, educational departments can reduce financial budgets which should be invested into non-profit
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. Eventually, a focus on technology in higher education could lead to new inventions, economic growth, and greater future prosperity. In spite of these arguments, I believe that university
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 should be free to choose their preferred areas of study. In my opinion, society will benefit more if our
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 are passionate about what they are learning.
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, nobody can really predict which areas of knowledge will be most useful to society in the future, and it may be that employers begin to value creative thinking skills above practical or technical skills. If
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 were the case, perhaps we would need more
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 of art, history and philosophy than of science or technology. In conclusion,
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 it might seem sensible for universities to focus only on the most useful
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, I personally prefer the current system in which
people
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 have the right to study whatever they like.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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