In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that some companies stress the creativity or
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products in their advertising campaigns. While I do not believe
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positive progress, even though the reason for
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. From my
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perspective
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, the main reason
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headlining the new feature of a product is that the majority of
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are prone to be attracted by
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new things and companies can make a high profit by selling more goods for
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season.
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, many
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are so crazy about the new generation of any product from the famous
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manufacturer
Apple. They prefer to spend a long time in front of the off-line stores operated by Apple just waiting
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get
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a new phone
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time. From
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, it is clear that communicating with
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customers
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about how new the
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product
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product
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brandowners
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brand owners
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more products.
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, I think it may be wrong to exaggerate the new
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characteristics
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characteristics
of a product in the
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advertising
advertisiting
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advertising
, because it may cause some social and
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environmental
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environmental
problems.
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phenomena
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may increase the danger of consumerism.
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will buy more than they need due to the effect of advertising. It could be a
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burden
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from disadvantaged backgrounds.
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, our environment will be damaged because of the heavy waste.
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, lots of
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prefer to change their phones yearly, even their older ones can satisfy their daily needs.
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our environment. To sum up, it is not responsible for companies to emphasise their new products all the time, while it
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them make more profits from
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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