Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Mankind has wanted to have expensive
life
since its creation. There is a new phenomenon that being rich and having luxury life
draws people
's attention more than their success ,unfortunately
it dramatically affects youngsters badly. I opineAdd a comma
,unfortunately
,
that sort of tendency will kill creativity and push Remove the comma
apply
people
to earn easy money instead
of working hard to gain an appropriate salary.
To begin
with, people
do not prefer to work in order to have luxury life
instead
of an intense schedule they are looking for the easy way. Even if they are successful when they have reached the
high standard of living, they stop working on it. Correct article usage
a
By doing
so, it would kill their creativity and their quality performance. Change preposition
Doing
For instance
, Hakan Kurt, who had been playing in the Goztepe football club from 2002 to 2005, was the most popular athlete in Turkey. Much
big football teams had desired to transfer him. Correct quantifier usage
Many
However
, after he had gotten good fortune, he finished his football life
.
On the other hand
, today’s world has constituted many lazy individuals with that case. Nobody desire to be a labour. Since they are thinking that they would be able to earn a fortune effortlessly. That fact has increased among young people
, nowadays. Therefore
big
amount of employers have difficulties finding an employee. Add an article
the big
This
results in a decrease in companies
production capacity. because young Change noun form
companies'
company's
people
take a pattern the celebrity's life
standard. for example
my cousine
Ahmet his biggest dream is to be a singer, but he does not want to work a regular job.
to sum up, famous Correct your spelling
cousin
people
's possessions and lifestyles have the wrong effect on youngsters. They are trying to have an easy fortune rather than gaining it while they are working. It has a massive effect on either famous people
or teenagers. hence
, they lose their creativity and also
companies have problem lack of a professional workforce.Submitted by altay0527 on
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