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Some people believe the benefit of tourism outweigh the problems it creates in a particular place. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Tourism
 is a dynamic and flourishing industry in the modern world. Proponents claim that the advantages exceed
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 disadvantages. I entirely agree with
this
 statement and will attempt to explain both sides in the following paragraphs. The
first
 and most important impact of
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tourism
 is on the
economic
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. It helps the growth of local small businesses and creates more
jobs
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 opportunities
especially
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 during high seasons.
For example
, imagine a remote island
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 a popular destination for
tourist
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 population.
As a result
,
this
 faraway island due to provide
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 of these people
and and
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to give satisfied services
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 has to set up more and more companies and businesses to meet the high level of requirement which needs a large number of workers.
Moreover
,
tourism
 allows visitors to experience and live in the culture of the country which might lead to
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 investors to finance in some parts.
For instance
, imagine Iran
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 carpet weaving is considered as its culture. If foreign companies find it financially beneficial to them, may invest in
this
 area and by doing
this
 the culture of carpet weaving will become recognised worldwide by the name of Iran beside it.
On the other hand
, there are some adverse effects on
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society.
Cost
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 of living and housing is one thing that can increase
as a result
 of
tourism
 which
make
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 difficulties for
local
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 population. As
a
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 example, consider some
touristic
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 cities namely London and Paris
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where the living cost is soaring day to day. Another negative point
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 be named is environmental damage. Take, heritage sites, as an example, that may be exposed to
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severe damage by the crowd of people regularly visiting those locations. Some
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 not know the value of
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historical places.
Therefore
, they throw away
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 all around and sometimes crave
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sharp tools on
these valuable stuff
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. To sum up, some are of the opinion that
tourism
 has a significant impact on a community economically and culturally
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 the pros surpass the cons. As I
discusses
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the
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above, I completely agree with the bright side of
tourism
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 industry.
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