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The roads in major cities today are often difficult to travel on. What are the causes of this? What are some possible solutions?

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 day and age, travelling on metropolitan
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 has become a matter of great concern.
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 is mainly due to the lack of proper infrastructure, but it can be controlled by constructing
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 with the use of appropriate materials. Amongst the major factors, degrading infrastructure of
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 is perhaps the most contributing significant element.
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 is because,
roads
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 have many loopholes, and rainwater collected in
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 causes travelling issues
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 as blockage, and companies who build
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 use the least quality of materials which increases the chances of breakage of
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. In India, Punjab, to exemplify, 80% of
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 have the worsted condition.
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, overpopulation is another reason.
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 to say, people are more likely to commute from one place to another by using their own private vehicles,
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, everywhere is loads of traffic congestion on
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. Turning to solutions, higher authorities ought to provide an excellent public transport facility to people so they travel pleasantly without any trouble along with decreasing the fares. By doing
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, traffic will be controlled to some extent. Not only
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, Companies must build the
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 by using
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high quality
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materials and reconstruct the
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 where breakage happens.
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, citizens should travel by using public transport
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 of their own vehicles. It
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 assists to make
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 easier and
effective
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more effective
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. In conclusion,
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the fact that it is quite difficult to travel on
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 in cities these days is a major concern we are facing today, if appropriate actions are taken by the government and individuals, it can be controlled to a greater extent.
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