"In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters, and writers. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?"

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In our modern world today, scientific and technological advances are popular,

people

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and people

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working in the fields of

arts

such

as artists, musicians, painters and writers still have their own value.

This

is because

arts

can teach us

about

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various things about life that

science

and

technology

do not have

this

ability.

Firstly

arts

make people

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see everything from different perspectives. In the area of

science

and

technology

, we see things exactly

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the way they are but in

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an artist’s

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artist’s

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eyes, we can see everything as we want and we feel about it.

For example

, in the approach of a researcher, a dog is just an animal with soft fur,

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and four

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legs and has the function to look after the house;

however

, a dog, to a writer,

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can be a faithful friend, a brave hero.

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thought helps us gain deeper and more thorough insights and it enables us to solve

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problems more wisely.

Secondly

, while

science

and

technology

may help us to develop physically,

arts

bring peace to our souls.

For instance

, whenever someone is depressed and hopeless, they often find music, which heals their souls and makes them feel more motivated. I think we hardly ever find

this

feeling when we carry out a scientific experiment or a technological survey. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that the world of

arts

can bring us a wide range of benefits that

science

and

technology

cannot.

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"In today’s world of advanced science and technology, we still greatly value our artists such as musicians, painters, and writers. What can arts tell us about life that science and technology cannot?"

Your opinion

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