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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
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Social
media
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 has marked a before and an after in terms of
communication
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almost
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 everything in technology, as well as in science, it can have advantages and disadvantages, and some people believe that
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 kind of
communication
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 has totally failed and
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 it should be forbidden. To a certain extent, it is true that social
media
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 has harmed the population on certain
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occasions
occations
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occasions
, but
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 should not be a reason to make it completely
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disappear
dissapear
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disappear
 from our lives.
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 of that, individuals should learn how to use
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 channel of
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 adequately, since they can
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benefit
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benefit
 from it immensely. In
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 day and age, we live in an era where
communication
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 plays an essential role in society, and never before there was
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 a huge
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amount
ammount
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amount
 of
information
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.
Communication
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 used to be a complex task in previous decades, but it became much
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 after the introduction of the Internet and other up-to-date technologies. Some time ago people had to wait long periods of time to receive a letter;
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, nowadays human
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 is instantaneous, owing to the high speed of social
media
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 applications,
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 as WhatsApp, Twitter or Facebook, so no more waiting is necessary. Another significant point in favour of social
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 is the dissemination of
information
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,
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 since it makes available to the public plenty of
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, which gives people the opportunity to acquire
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 about an important
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array
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arrey
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 of
domaines
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domains
. Of course,
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 have some drawbacks: there are no processes to select the
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 and, as a consequence, fake news
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 disseminated.
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 from non-quality one. In conclusion, it is my belief that social
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 should not be banned just because it can have some negative impact on society.
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Instead
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 of that, individuals should learn how to make
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responsible and proper use of it, so they can still benefit from its positive sides and minimise its negative effects.
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