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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
Social
media
 has marked a before and an after in terms of
communication
. As
almost
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 everything in technology, as well as in science, it can have advantages and disadvantages, and some people believe that
this
 kind of
communication
 has totally failed and
therefore
 it should be forbidden. To a certain extent, it is true that social
media
 has harmed the population on certain
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occasions
occations
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occasions
, but
this
 should not be a reason to make it completely
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disappear
dissapear
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disappear
 from our lives.
Instead
 of that, individuals should learn how to use
this
 channel of
communication
 adequately, since they can
also
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benefit
benifit
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benefit
 from it immensely. In
this
 day and age, we live in an era where
communication
 plays an essential role in society, and never before there was
such
 a huge
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amount
ammount
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amount
 of
information
.
Communication
 used to be a complex task in previous decades, but it became much
accessible
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 after the introduction of the Internet and other up-to-date technologies. Some time ago people had to wait long periods of time to receive a letter;
however
, nowadays human
communication
 is instantaneous, owing to the high speed of social
media
 applications,
such
 as WhatsApp, Twitter or Facebook, so no more waiting is necessary. Another significant point in favour of social
media
 is the dissemination of
information
,
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 since it makes available to the public plenty of
information
, which gives people the opportunity to acquire
knowledges
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pieces of knowledge
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 about an important
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array
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arrey
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 of
domaines
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domains
. Of course,
this
 can
also
 have some drawbacks: there are no processes to select the
information
 and, as a consequence, fake news
are
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 disseminated.
This
 is the reason why the public should learn how to distinguish quality
information
 from non-quality one. In conclusion, it is my belief that social
media
 should not be banned just because it can have some negative impact on society.
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Instead
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 of that, individuals should learn how to make
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responsible and proper use of it, so they can still benefit from its positive sides and minimise its negative effects.
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