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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweight the disadvantages?

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People are divided in their opinion regarding
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responsible to drive a vehicle,
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, buses and trucks. I strongly disagree that the advantages outnumber the disadvantages. It is widely believed that a driverless automobile will make
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 more productive while sitting in the
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 of wasting time driving solely from one address to another, you can use
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 new free time to read a book, attend an online meeting or even take a nap during the route.
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 to change life due to the impact that
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, I believe that driverless vehicles
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 more cons than pros.
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 technology will
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 bring an upward trend of unemployment. Every public transport that now has
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 will not need them anymore.
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, bus drivers and
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 drivers will need to learn a new job.
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, it is seen that
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 invention due to the malfunction that a system is propitious to have. As
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, recently an automatic
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 caused an unhappy accident involving 2 cyclists. The machine had a software breakdown and the driver could do nothing to avoid
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 to the death of the victims. To sum up, I believe that humans need to be more aware not only
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 the advantages but
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 the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • driverless technology
  • road safety
  • human error
  • traffic flow
  • congestion
  • real-time data
  • cost benefits
  • fuel consumption
  • vehicle maintenance
  • mobility
  • cyber-attacks
  • technical failures
  • infrastructure adaptations
  • ethical considerations
  • moral responsibility
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