The gap between the rich and the poor is increasingly wide, as poor people become poorer and rich people become richer. What problems could this situations cause? what are the solutions to address those problems?

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the gap between
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affluent
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the affulent
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and the
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impoverished
is increasingly wide as
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become poorer and wealthier become wealthier. If we consider the whole wealth of
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100
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billionaires
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billionaires
in India it will sum
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up to
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up to
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billion people of
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India,
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billionaires
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billionaires
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wealth equal to
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of 99.99% of the population. The ensuing paragraphs will discuss the main causes and
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solutions for
this
plight. The affluent ones are either salaried or business class both are having
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income.
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take the
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of
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class they will get their wages
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whatever
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what ever
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the conditions are. Even if they are
layed
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laid
off from their
job
, it is easier for them to get another
job
because of their educational qualification and work experience. If we take the
case
of Business class, they are having enough capital to start new ventures or to improve existing ones. They will get enough credit support in
case
needed from formal Bank facilities because they are credit-worthy. If we take the scenario of
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they are mostly ill-literate and
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a backward background. They depend mostly on unskilled
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and are farmers or labourers. They reside in
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rural areas
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job
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opportunities
oppertunities
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opportunities
are
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fewer
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and even if they migrate to cities they will be outrun by skilled workers
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getting
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skilled work. If the
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is having a notion of starting
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business, they are deprived of capital and bank credit, because they are not
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. Though there are so many
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on
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this
problem, there are some solutions to overcome
this
. Of the many
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the
first
one is we must have
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compulsory
education for all. If we make the
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impoverished
literate it is easier for them to get skilled work and neither they will be exploited by wealthy
job
providers. A study by Mahatma Gandhi university Kerala depicted that
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states
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literacy
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the literacy
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rate is high the gap between
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and wealthy narrows.
In addition
,
government
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the government
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has to initiate Employment generation programs in
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with Banks. To conclude, understanding the causes of
increasing
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the increasing
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gap between rich people and
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improvised
impoverished
such
as irregular income and
ill-literacy
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ill literacy
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and the solution
such
as education for all and employment generation programs, it is hopeful that government and social activists will take adequate steps to ensure the well-being of
improvished
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improvised
impoverished
as well as wealthy.
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