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nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

#people #health #alternative #medicines #treatments #doctor
Some people prefer using alternative ways to get well with
health
 problems to
visiting
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 their doctor, I think alternative
medicine
 has a negative development
to
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on
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 society and
health
.
To begin
 with, different types of treatment are not always reliable for everyone. That means some way of curing may occur allergies or
other disease
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another disease
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 in
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an organism
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organism
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organisms
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.
For example
, magnet treatment can cause a headache for a few people. It is dangerous to try
unknown
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the unknown
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way
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 of
nurse
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a nurse
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 because of
high
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 risk of sickness.
Furthermore
, many
of
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establishment
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 that doesn’t
related
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with
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medicine
 deceive patients by selling
pseudo medicaments
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.
Moreover
,
medicine
 has no effect and it is really costly. Because
if
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 untruthful
advertisement
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advertisements
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 on the website, many people
buying
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 them and
having
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 no idea
that is
 just a trick.
For instance
, my mother ordered medicaments to treat her leg, but
this
 preparation didn’t give a little effect. Most
of
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medicine
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the medicine
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 in
adds
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ads
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 has no benefit that
cheat
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 customers with high prices. To conclude, other ways to treat
health
 problems may have
amiss
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 effect
to
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community
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the community
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 of sufferers and their
health
 state due to
trickment
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the trickment
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 of companies and possible negative consequences on
body
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the body
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