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Using a smartphone to make calls, send and receive emails, access the internet, and so on, has become an essential part of many people's lives. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is an undeniable fact that the
use
 of mobile
phones
 across the world
are
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 increasing day by day. The assistance of
cell
phones
 to contact others, to dispatch and collect messages, to enter
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cyberspace, etcetera has become an unavoidable factor in everyone's lives.
This
 essay will
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demonstrate
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demonstrate
 the merits and demerits of
this
 growth. Though there are drawbacks
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this
 development,
this
 essay will argue that the advantages of cellular
phones
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 the disadvantages. On the one hand, of the many merits, the
first
 one is that
,
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 it is effortless to handle
the
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mobile
phones
. To clarify, it is very easy to carry a
cell
 phone with people without any discomfort.
In addition
, mobile
phones
 can be used
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 any
circumstances
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 and
it
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 can be used by any age group. It is uncomplicated to check
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emails, missed calls, reminders, and so on.
Furthermore
,
cell
phones
 are providing not only extra information to students but
also
 it is helpful in assisting
adult's
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 doubts.
For instance
, a study conducted by Teacher Trainees in Kerala in 2018 depicted that 60% of students
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 their mobile
phones
 to clear their
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uncertainties
uncertainities
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uncertainties
.
However
, an increase in the
use
 of cellular
phones
 may cause some serious issues,
such
 as
,
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the
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overuse
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over
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use
leads
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 to the wastage of
time
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addiction
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 it. To elaborate, severe craving
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 mobile
phones
 may
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 in
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drastic negative effects on a person's life. It may end up with the termination of life or serious health problems
such
 as depression.
Moreover
, surplus
use
 of internet accessed mobile
phones
 by children not only affects their education by
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a reduction
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 in study
time
, sleeping
time
 and leisure
time
 but
also
it
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may trap the younger generation in drugs or women exploitation groups. To
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ilustrate
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, it is evident from daily news that more than 50% of students who are using their own
cell
phones
 were getting cheated by
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 nowadays. To conclude,
although
 the
use
 of mobile
phones
have
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 merits
such
 as easy accessibility, it
also
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possess
 some negative impacts
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the
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society
such
 as the misleading of children.
Thus
, it is hopeful that the government will take adequate steps to ensure the healthy
use
 of mobile
phones
 and
hence
, the positive effects of
cell
phones
 outweigh the demerits.
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