Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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competitiveness should be instilled in children. Some people assert that a sense of competition encourages them to do their best, whereas others argue that it induces aggression. In

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I will overview both of these opinions. To start with, a sense of competition encourages growth. More specifically, by getting a taste of defeat, a child would want to put more effort

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, if they lose at their previous football games, it encourages them to do better and train more so they could win in the

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, competitiveness increases motivation and shows that they always need to pursue excellence,

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they would not win. Those traits would help them in

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life, and be beneficial in critical situations, like competing for a better workplace.

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not like people that are always competitive. Individuals that are not as competitive, get more commonly accepted by the majority

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because they are not seen as a threat.

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, over-competitiveness can lead to a range of issues, like- aggression, losing themselves in the idea of winning over having a good time, anger issues,

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. If a child begins to see everything as an opportunity to compete, it could be very harmful

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them, as they probably would lose their friends,

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into fights with siblings or classmates. Having considered both views, I think that

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sense of competition should be instilled in children, as it encourages them to do their best and increases motivation. All these traits are positive and would help them in future. On balance, I would assert that competitiveness is not their main personality trait, and they do not try to compete with everyone in every given situation.