Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patients do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?

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perspective, it is so vital for the elderly to have regular
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on daily bases.
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that make most illnesses reluctant to plan regular
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in their daily routines, in
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essay I offer some solutions to make them keen on doing
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. There are a great number of
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which make senior citizens ignore regular
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, most elderly suffer from health problems and for a great deal of time feel tired and exhausted,
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, due to lack of energy, they ignore physical exercises.
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, some mental and emotional problems like depression, stress or loneliness enhance by growing age,
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, they become unable to do other activities or physical exercises and mostly prefer to stay at home, reading or watching movies.
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, financial problems are a decisive factor to force them to work more like becoming taxi drivers;
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, they have to seat for a long time behind the wheel. All of the mentioned
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have a key role to stop regular
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. There are three effective solutions to tackle
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problem. The main solution is that the government have to impose or improve the suitable passion of the seniors to support their main needs like having appropriate food or accommodation.
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, government authorities must have close attention to public and
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facilities ,especially public parks. it makes the elderly gather together and not only communicate with each other
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benefited from these facilities and do some
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activities.
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,
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hiring some physicians or
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trainers to visit monthly or once in a season and visit patients and check their activities freely in the park, might be efficient. In conclusion, I am convinced that,
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there are a number of
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that make older people ignore daily-routine exercises, using some effective methods can easily tackle
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problem as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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