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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some individuals claim that doing unpaid charity work in teenagers’ free time should be a mandatory requirement because it gives benefits both individuals and the
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. From my perspective, I am against the above idea and
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 essay will illustrate the reason.
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 with, unpaid
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 work is supposed to be done voluntarily only. As minors have different duties and responsibilities, they should have their own right to manage their time as some
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 might have limited free time and might not be able to do anything else.
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, some individuals need to do part-time jobs
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 as cashier, waiter/ waitress, tutor and nanny to support their family and their own tuition fee. Meanwhile, others might help take care of their elder family members or help their family business.
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, rather than compulsory unpaid
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 jobs, offering volunteering jobs with some benefit or perks might encourage the younger generation to participate and it will be beneficial to both parties.
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, the
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 should offer a paid part-time volunteer job in which
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 will earn a little money to motivate them to join.
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, when participating as volunteers,
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 should earn a credible score and can use it in their portfolio when applying for a degree in some major
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 as sociology and political sciences. To summarise, with all reasons taken into account, I firmly believe that it is not necessary for all teens to do
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 service as youngsters should have the right to select whether they agree to participate or not. In case some
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 are willing to do it,
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 organisations should offer them more options to be volunteers like waged work and credible scores for their future studies.
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