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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The knowledge we gain from personal experiences is more valuable than the knowledge we gain from books. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Do not use memorized examples .

#gain #experiences #books #support
In recent days we have a
lot
 of ways to learn about
world
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, some
people
 believe that
study
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 from
experience
are
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is
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 more easily rather than learn from
books
,
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apply
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 because it can directly give us information where the location we have
mistake
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a mistake
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,
then
 we can fix it.
first
 of all,
plethora
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a plethora
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 of individuals
argue
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argues
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 that learning
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through
trhough
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through
 personal
skill
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skills
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more
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is more
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 effective
instead
 of
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through
trhough
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through
books
.
Hence
,
people
 prefer to choose
practice
 on their subject because it can give more
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knowledge
knowlage
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knowledge
 and information.
For instance
,
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people
poeple
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people
 who want to learn
driving
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to drive
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 a car
they
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apply
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tend to go to the
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professional
professionals
proffesional
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professional
 to
practice
 how to drive.
As a
result
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 they can
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receive
recieve
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receive
 a
lot
 of
experience
 while driving a car.
second
 of all, some
people
 think that
theoritical
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theoretical
are
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is
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 important as
a
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apply
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fundamental to
practice
.
However
, at the same time we need
combine
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it
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them
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,
people
 need to
practica
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practice
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 because it can lead
some
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improvement
iprovement
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improvement
 for them.
For example
,
student
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students
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 have spent a
lot
 of time
to study
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studying
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many
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and many
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books
 that they have read, without
practice
 they can not realize where they have a mistake,
moreover
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,moreover
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 pupils can fix their problems. In conclusion,
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knowledge
knowlage
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knowledge
 will be gain not only from reading
books
 but
also
 from
experience
.
Therefore
, a
lot
 of
persons
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people
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 think that
experience
have
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has
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 more beneficial rather than
books
.
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