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Many people in education argue that examinations are the only objective way to assess a student’s progress. Others claim that examinations are unfair on people who suffer from exam nerves. They also say that examinations are not the best way to encourage creativity among students. What do you think is the best way to assess students ?

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 who believe
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, if a student takes an exam and fails or the results are not as expected, the teacher can guide him and prepare for better results next time
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 success can be guaranteed. Many consider that examinations are the only objective
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 progress. Considering
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technologies and
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, others say that examinations stress
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 and don’t encourage creativity.
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 may have negative effects on
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, leading to different health issues.
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 the student is not well- rested and can’t think properly, having no creativity with
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Estimated score: 5. Your main answer is clear, but it is not fully developed. The question asks for the best way to assess students. Explain why exams are better than other ways, such as class work, projects, or teacher notes.
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Your view has a small problem. You say exams are best, but you also say they may be stressful and “not efficient at all”. Make your final view more clear. You could say exams should be the main part, with class work as support.
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Give more real and clear examples. For example, say how an exam can show a student’s level in maths, while a project can show art or team work.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas repeat. You say exams are objective in the first, second, and last paragraphs. Put this point in one body paragraph, then add a new main point in the next.
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Make each paragraph follow one simple plan: main idea, why it is true, then an example. This will make your writing easier to follow.
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Some links are not clear. For example, “Considering nowadays’ technologies” does not clearly lead to your point about exams. Use direct links such as “This is because” or “As a result”.
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You give a clear view: exams are the best main way to assess progress.
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You include both sides: fair testing and the stress exams can cause.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and an ending.
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You use clear link words such as “For example”, “On the contrary”, and “Overall”.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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