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Some people believe that universities should only recruit young people with good school grades. Others believe that everyone should be given a chance regardless their age and school marks. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #universities #school #grades #chance #age #marks
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In recent times, universities are giving preference to the
students
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 who are good in
academic
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 rather
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 on the skills of the individuals and giving them
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. In my opinion, I believe that schools should give
chance
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 to
everyone
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. To start with,
everyone
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 should get
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chance
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 to compete with each and every type of
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students
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student
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nobody
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no body
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nobody
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 is perfect and can not excel in the field of academics but
same
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 person can be good
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another
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other
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skills
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skill
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 or
activity
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. In
this
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 way,
everyone
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 can learn from each other and learn quite a few things which they are not familiar with and they will explore more things and can get
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perspective
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perspectives
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 about their
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lives
life
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lives
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.
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, Delhi University gives
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 based on
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good
marks
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 as well as on the basis of sports.
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,
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everyone
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 deserving should be getting
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 fair
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 to show themselves. It
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 shows that
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 it might have
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a downside
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by
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 giving
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 to
everyone
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, there won't be any type of competition amongst
students
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 with good
marks
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 always stay on the top because they want to stay in the limelight and want to get recognition
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 their work.
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, with good
grades
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,grades
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 there might be
good
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chance
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 of clearing the interview
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with
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big
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 company. No institute like to see
average
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the average
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marks
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 of their colleges are getting down as
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effect
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 directly on their reputation. institutes ended in giving
admission
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 on the basis of
marks
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. To conclude, with grades
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universities
univirsities
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universities
 start noticing
at
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the skills of
students
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 who want
admission
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in
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the
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good colleges.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academically rigorous
  • foundational knowledge
  • likelihood of academic success
  • adaptability
  • limited university resources
  • proven academic capabilities
  • cognitive abilities
  • dynamic and vibrant community
  • lifelong learning
  • inclusive education
  • develop at different rates
  • potential and capability
  • diverse perspectives
  • enriching the learning environment
  • equal opportunity
  • social inequalities
  • personal growth
  • professional advancement
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