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Some people believe that universities should only recruit young people with good school grades. Others believe that everyone should be given a chance regardless their age and school marks. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #universities #school #grades #chance #age #marks
In recent times, universities are giving preference to the
students
 who are good in
academic
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academics
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 rather
focusing
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 on the skills of the individuals and giving them
chance
. In my opinion, I believe that schools should give
chance
 to
everyone
. To start with,
everyone
 should get
equal
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chance
 to compete with each and every type of
students
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student
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. To elaborate,
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nobody
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no body
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nobody
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 is perfect and can not excel in the field of academics but
same
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 person can be good
in
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at
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another
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other
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skills
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skill
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 or
activity
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activities
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. In
this
 way,
everyone
 can learn from each other and learn quite a few things which they are not familiar with and they will explore more things and can get
new
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perspective
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perspectives
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 about their
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lives
life
life's
lifes
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lives
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.
For example
, Delhi University gives
admission
 based on
the
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good
marks
 as well as on the basis of sports.
As a result
,
everyone
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 deserving should be getting
the
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a
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 fair
chance
 to show themselves. It
further
 shows that
,
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 it might have
downside
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a downside
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by
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to
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 giving
admission
 to
everyone
. To explain
this
, there won't be any type of competition amongst
students
 with good
marks
 always stay on the top because they want to stay in the limelight and want to get recognition
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 their work.
Furthermore
, with good
grades
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,grades
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 there might be
good
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a good
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chance
 of clearing the interview
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with
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big
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a big
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 company. No institute like to see
average
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marks
 of their colleges are getting down as
this
 will
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 directly on their reputation. institutes ended in giving
admission
 on the basis of
marks
. To conclude, with grades
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universities
univirsities
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universities
 start noticing
at
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apply
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the skills of
students
 who want
admission
in
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to
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the
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apply
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good colleges.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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