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Some countries allow old people to work to any stage that they want. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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Working culture has changed with
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 and so as people. Some nations promote people of any
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 to participate in economic growth and few don’t find it for the elderly to
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 in the hectic
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 environment. In my opinion,I believe the mentally fit and sound older
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 should be encouraged to
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, elderly people are the most knowledgeable and experienced which no
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 can be as the
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 experience, and life experience they have none of the new generations will have, their experience will be close to somewhere around 40-50 years. Another point is that at
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 they do not have much
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 to do
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 will keep them engrossed as their children do not spend much
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 with them.
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 will make them independent and confident. ,
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 many countries do not encourage
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 practice as they believe at
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 mind does not
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 as effectively as in the young
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, they are more prone to fall sick and will demand breaks
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,
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 will be suffered. Other health issues like dementia
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 and anger issues may lead to disbalance in the team working with them. To conclude, I would suggest the old
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 should spend more
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 living their dreams which they didn’t fulfil because of long working hours, should relax They should spend quality
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 with their loved ones. Stress and
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 pressure will lead to more health issues which are not good at
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intergenerational
  • knowledge transfer
  • mentor
  • labor shortage
  • economic growth
  • sense of purpose
  • well-being
  • adopt new technologies
  • fast-changing
  • generation gap
  • upward mobility
  • workplace diversity
  • professional expectations
  • aging populations
  • work ethics
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