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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Convenience
foods
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 are becoming increasingly available in today’s markets. They are very popular among
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working class
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 people and
youth
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 population.
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, there are two sides
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 it which will be explained in the following paragraphs. The
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 and foremost reason
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 their popularity is reducing the preparation time which is an excellent benefit for those who
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 most of
hours
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. To explain more, since these
foods
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 are usually ready-to-eat and only is needed heating or thawing, maximum
five
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 to ten minutes are required for preparation.
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an
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example, canned soups, frozen
foods
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 and washed vegetables can be named.
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, the presentation and clean-up would be quick and easy. Since the food is kept and stored in disposable containers and
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 adequate for one person, there is no need to set extra plates. Cutleries sometimes are included
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 the packaging.
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, no need for setting a proper table or cleaning up at the end is necessary. Overall, convenient
foods
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 have brought comfort and peace of mind to
busy
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the busy
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 working population.
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, some drawbacks are considered in
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 of these ready meals.
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, the costs of these products are significantly higher than the ingredients needed to cook them. To elaborate, due to packaging, pre-cooking and adding different
seasoning
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, the costs per serving
increases
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. Another obvious con is the high level of sodium, fat, trans-fat and sugar which are unhealthy and may cause heart disease, high blood pressure, diabetes and obesity. In general, the adverse effect of these products will cost a lot and will cause medical issues. To summarize, while
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convenience
foods
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 make lives more comfortable, the negative aspects of these products can not be neglected. As regards convenient
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, the disadvantages outnumbered the advantages.
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