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People in 21st centuries have better quality of life rather than previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The importance of the standard of living for human beings was always debatable and now has become more controversial. Some masses believe that comfort is better than in previous eras. While others reject
this
 notion. I strongly agree with the former proposition and In
this
 essay, I will shed light on my opinion on why the 21st
century
 has better well-being than the previous
one
 and
thus
 leading to a logical conclusion.
To begin
 with, there are myriad of reasons which will
further
 elaborate the
trend
 but the most preponderant
one
 stem from the fact that due to advancement in a transportation facility and better infrastructure ,
human
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 being is able to commute the distance freely in less time frame which was not available in
last
 year’s. Another pivotal aspect of the
trend
 is that educational platforms are visible online to everyone in the 21st
century
. The learner does not have to visit to take admissions.
Moreover
 , they can access their syllabus online and learn without confirming their attendance offline in institutions. Even though today's educational field become so advanced and provides short multiple hours services for
their
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 students. Learners can attend their classes anytime and choose a shorter programs according to their requirements which will add to their hat and help them in
further
 professional fields.
Also
 in the current ,
century
people
 have more accessible resources of food without going to other states and countries.
In other words
,
people
 can enjoy a variety of food in their native place
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 just
one
 click on the screen.
Hence
, most
people
 are in favour of
this
trend
.
However
 , there are some pitfalls that negate
this
 argument. Which can certainly overwhelm the potential influence of
this
trend
 and the most alarming
one
 is that due to the industrialization banking system more fragrant activities occur. Thefts can use just a little information about the person and steal all the money
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 is why some
people
 are against
this
trend
. To recapitulate, according to the aforementioned above
one
 can reach the conclusion that the benefits of the living standard in the 21st
century
 are many and instrumental.
Nevertheless
 , its potential drawback should not be overlooked either.
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