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Prison is the best punishment for criminals . Discuss both views.

#prison #punishment #criminals
As far as I can judge, Nowadays, offence and delinquency have
punishment
 ,even , in most countries capital
punishment
 . Itself evident majority of people believe that the penalty should focus more on rehabilitation
instead
 of prolonging
prison
 terms . On the one hand , I must admit that inmates who have harmed other people physically and mentally should not be in
prison
 .
In addition
for instance
 other
crimes
such
 as vandalism or tax evasion , I agree we should make prisoners repay the victim or society with an appropriate
punishment
 .
Therefore
 another option needs to be found the troubles are the alternatives ,
,
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likewise
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 community service is often seen as a soft option.
On the other hand
 ,Unfortunately , criminals should be appealed to
prison
 for the long term,
Besides
, I totally disagree that
prison
 is a particularly good way to rehabilitate some people as it just educates them in the ways of criminals for serious
crimes
such
 as sex offences and serial killers or murders. It goes without saying that every offence especially as I mentioned above should be capital
punishment
 inevitable .
However
 , these days many prisons permit inmates to have luxuries
such
 as video games and TVs and top chefs cooking their food , But it is impossible and unbelievable .
Prison
 should be a form or place of
punishment
 ,not a holiday camp or place where murderers can get a degree in psychology at the taxpayers' expense. In my opinion, the government should be controlled the majority of
crimes
prison
 is the best answer But apparently
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murder and violent
crimes
 should carry the death penalty particularly capital
punishment
 .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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