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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes while others think one can’t be judged on the basis of one’s clothes. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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Time and again, it has been seen how
people
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 form quick judgments based on how
one
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 looks and especially the
clothes
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one
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 wears. Some
people
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 hold
it
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that
one
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 can be easily assessed by their
clothes
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 while some say that it is impractical and baseless to judge
people
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 upon how they
dress
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. In the paragraphs to come, I shall be putting forth my views on both
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topics and
peddle
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 up my opinion on the topic. Some
people
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 consider that it is very much possible to talk about a
person
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’s
character
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 and traditions based on their dresses. Very commonly it is seen how
people
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 hastily opine about
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one’s
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 personality.
One
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 can’t be known entirely and
therefore
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, what we see a
person
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 wearing tends to make us form opinions about them. Talking about evaluating
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one’s
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 culture and going by the ethnic wear, it is quite easy to differentiate an individual from
one
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 part of the world from another
person
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 belonging to a different culture.
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, a Rajasthani (a
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 from
an
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 Indian state of Rajasthan) can be conspicuously recognized by their
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.
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 to that, a
person
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 from a western country can be very easily identified based on their western
clothes
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, and
hence
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, we may get to know where a
person
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 comes from and what are
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cultural values that a
person
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 has been brought up with as per their attire. In stark contrast to that, a significant number of
people
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 expound that the notion of judging a
person
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’s
character
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 and culture as per their outfit is extremely erroneous and untenable. I find myself
swinging
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 along with
this
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 viewpoint. Judging
one
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 on
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one’s
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dress
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 is erroneous and filled with loopholes.
Firstly
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, talking about gauging
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one’s
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 cultural values
one
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 holds and the traditions
one
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 pertains to is extremely erroneous as
one
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 won’t be wearing
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one’s
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 traditional attire every time, especially given how
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people
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 today are inclined towards comfort and ease.
One
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 might not always want to undergo the hassles of carrying a cultural
dress
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 and
hence
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 perhaps would be donning a cloth much
facile
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 to carry.
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,
people
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 around the globe are often seen wearing and aligning towards western
clothes
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 these days, thereby making it all the more difficult to sniff the roots of a
person
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. From the
character
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 aspect, it is immensely unpragmatic and shallow to evaluate a
person
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’s
character
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 merely upon how
one
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 chooses to
dress
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 as to how a
person
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 is at heart has no pertinence to what
one
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 selects to look as on the outer front. Conclusively, we may
therefore
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 say that though
one
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 could be analyzed based on
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one’s
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 outfit,
one
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 can’t be judged and adjudicated thoroughly based on their
dress
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 and appearance. After all, a piece of cloth can’t reflect the complex personality of an individual and
hence
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 is a faltered way of analyzing
one
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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