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news editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspaper. what factors do you think influence their decision? Do we used to bed news ? would it be better if more good news was reported ?

#news #editors #broadcast #television #print #newspaper #factors #influence #decision
It became regular for
editors
 to choose
information
 shared on television or written in newspapers. Factors of their decision mainly would be to make
news
 more catchy and to draw more attention. Often it appears that most of the broadcasted
news
are
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 negative,
however
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 the emergence of more positive
news
 would lift the spirit of society and create a good frame of mind for the day.
Editors
 are constantly seeking
for
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sensations, so the community would be interested in the reported
news
.
For instance
, mostly
in
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television
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 some unexpected and fascinating
information
 is shown. Nowadays, most journalism education programs involve the fact that
information
 should be catchy. Celebrities' divorces,
disasters
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and disasters
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 in the world,
that
is
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the
information
editors
 prefer to print in newspapers. Often, only the most discussed
news
are
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 considered as successful. It becomes regular to see
news
 broadcasting catastrophes and disasters being highlighted. It creates a wrong view
on
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 things.
For instance
, it was widely discussed that as a consequence of showing in the
news
 only how
aircrafts
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aircraft
 crash, society tends to believe that it is dangerous,
however
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 it is the safest type of transportation.
Increase
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of
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 the number of good
news
 would possibly make people happier. As life is giving complications by itself, bad
news
 creates a negative impact emphasizing people's worries and problems. In conclusion,
editors
 tend to choose captivating
information
 over
a
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regular but
with
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positive context. As
news
 has an impact on human mental processes, broadcasting more
news
 that contains pleasing content would improve people's quality of life by creating a more positive environment.
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