In my countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places.It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree ?

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. I believe that most of the people in the world have more information about their
health
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conditions. Nowadays, information about how harmful is to smoke for our bodies can be seen in many packets of cigars.
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things can change from our recent past. There is a clear trend in the diminishing of smokers and if
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habits
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can choose what to eat every day. Mostly everybody, from developed societies,
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the importance of having a healthy diet. Advances
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the menus of fast food restaurants will help people to
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a clever choice before they choose what to eat. Another important issue that I would like to mention is how medicine is changing. There are new
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and treatments almost every week and
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symptom
of how things are changing in order to improve the world’s
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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