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The construction of
this
 unique
transformer-
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house
 took 40 years.
House
 includes 24 types
different
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room
 configurations.
This
marvelous
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 technology is located in
Hong-Kong
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Hong Kong
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 – inside
overpopulated
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 city of the world. It is unbelievable, how it is possible to accommodate all thing in 32 square meters
?
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 The author of
this
 creation is 54 years old engineer from Hong Kong – Harry Chen,
placed
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 inside his property
spa
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 zone, gaming
room
, massive bathroom and even
library
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. The owner is sure that there are still some free places in
house
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.
However
, it is not surprising – all space starting from
floor
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 to ceiling was assigned
for
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to
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 many shelves and
special
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 mechanism set them in motion, in order to create
new
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room
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. After all, everything comes back
the
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 wave of a magic wand. There behind the bookshelf are located
bar
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, TV, dining table for 5 persons, dish-washing machine and laundry. When their space is available, the
house
’s owner practices yoga, meantime observing from the window the eternal bustle of the sleepless city.
This
house
 deserves 1st place for creativity and efficient use of space! The
house
 without floors with an area of 74 square meters is located in Tokyo. Because of the small number of walls from the inside, it looks just huge. The accommodation consists of 3 floors and
garden
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 and on the roof there
connected
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 stairs, which
much
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 more exceeding the area. The low walls, which seem
floating
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 in the air -
spearate
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separate
room
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. The construction
connected
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 by one collum, enter to which is located in one of the alleys of
business
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center
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 in
Tokio
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Tokyo
. It is unlikely that the local residents come home tipsy
,
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 because they risk falling from the 3rd floor in a
house
 with stairs without railings, but If to
sidcuss
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discuss
 about design,
this
house
 is a real work of art.
This
 invisible
house
 is more likely to be the
the
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desire of Wonder Woman *персонаж из клмикса*. She could definitely place her plane here!
Innovative
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 design of
this
house
 ideally distinguishes itself
as
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external
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 environment. Its glassed outer cover merges with
the
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nature, surrounding around meantime dissolving in the blue of the sky. The layout inside the
house
 can be easily changed and adjusted to the needs of any tenant. Thanks to the modular system, the components are manufactured at the factory, and
then
 brought to the construction site. Now, it is time to find out the invisible
house
 in the midst of a forest. It is hard to believe, but
this
 incredible modular
house
 is achievable in terms of price. It costs just 114K USD and includes internal sections and furniture. It is
pretty
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 good deal. These kinds of magic houses are
constructing
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 in Slovenia.
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