Write about the following topic: Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

People should always save
money
for the future because
this
will add a better retirement and
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more
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comfortable
confortable
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comfortable
life in the future by not needing to work so much. Saving
money
is a complex thing and it is important that people save
money
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wright
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choices on spending less on useless things. Not paying taxes to the state
it
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is a very
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and
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inappropriate
inapropriated
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thing to do
instead
this
would
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give more trouble and more expenses to the person. There is a phrase that says "You pay taxes when you are making
money
" ,
this
is an
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intriguing
phrase that
try
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to show that wheater you are earning
money
you are paying more tax and
that is
how it is supposed to be. Paying taxes may bring you
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benefits like a better life quality since the state will provide with
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benefits and infrastructure, so in a
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it is an investment that you do.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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