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These days , more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time , either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss

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It is widely acknowledged that with the development of globalization and science, most
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 prefer to move abroad in order to work and study. Some
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 think that
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 leads to some benefits and profits for them and other
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 are against
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 idea.
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, one of the main positives of heading overseas is that it broadens your horizons. What I mean by
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 is that you have the chance to meet
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 from different cultural backgrounds.
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 , moving abroad can lead to a better quality of our life. Taking British
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. Thousand of
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 from the UK move to Spanish and Australia every year . These countries have warmer climates and encourage a better work-life balance .
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, by living overseas, you can gain qualifications and language skills which may improve promotion prospects on your return.
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 , culture shock is a major problem. Many
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 who live abroad for a few years , especially the
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 years , come across a lot of obstacles
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 as language barriers, food and general cultural differences.
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 , in turn , leads to homesickness and some cases a sense of isolation . Another issue is that when you move to a foreign country , you have to make new friends and find your place in the community .
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 process takes time and can be especially challenging. To sum up, taking everything into consideration
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 there are several disadvantages of moving abroad , I strongly believe that these cannot outweigh their advantages.
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