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Schools should stop using books to teach and use filims,tv or computer in the classroom instead.To what extent do you agree or disagree

#schools #books #filims #tv #computer #classroom
In the modern era, everything is computerised.It is believed by some that
instead
 of using
books
 as study material, it is better to opt for modern technology like tv or computers.I agree with the statement that through visual images
children
 learn faster compared with
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book
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. Films provide visual learning thereby increasing better understanding than simply byhearting.
Also
,it can be memorised more easily than from
record
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.
For instance
,it is harder to remember concepts from history but through historical films, concepts can be clearer.
Thus
 it is clear that films could provide understanding. Another reason is that carrying
books
 daily to the classroom is a physical burden.Through ,technology information can be available at any time and can be stored as
a soft copies
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soft copies
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.when required can be accessed easily.
For example
, during the pandemic victor channel provided
a teaching methods
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 with experiments,which was interesting for
children
.According to parental ,reports it was very useful for parents and
children
 to learn.
Thus
 did not require to take the
books
.
In addition
,tv or computers in the classroom interest
children
. Lessons can be caught through animations which helps in memorising the events and could help in
a better scores
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a better score
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. It
also
 enhances imaginative skills and be a good candidate for the future. To conclude,computer,tv or film helps in visual learning and
this
 can be an alternative to
books
.
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