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Nowadays many people eat very badly in spite of the information which is available about ways to have a healthy, balanced diet.

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Over the years, health issues have become more severe. It is considered that the vast majority of
population
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consume
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consumes
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 junk
food
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instead
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 of following a balanced diet. In
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 essay, the causes of
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 issue will be analysed with relevant solutions. One of the main causes of the problem is that natural and organic products are more expensive than fast
food
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.
The most
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of
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the
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people
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 around the world are not able to afford proper nutrition because they do not make enough money to spend on healthy
food
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. In my country,
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, a burger in a
fast
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fast-food
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food
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 restaurant will cost twice cheaper than a bowl of soup. The solution
of
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this
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 problem is for the government to reduce the prices
on
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of
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 basic balanced products and pay more attention
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to
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this
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. Another problem is that a great number of
people
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 do not have plenty of time to spend on cooking.
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 to say,
people
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 often have a lack of time because of work and other daily routine duties. They are not able to stick to a balanced diet because it is easier to buy frozen pizza or
burger
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burgers
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 and just heat it up in a microwave than stand for hours behind the stove. To tackle
this
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 issue, every store should start to sell cooked dishes
such
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 as salads and soups at an affordable price. To sum up
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, nowadays
people
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 are more likely to consume unhealthy
food
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 due to their busy lifestyle and lack of time,
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 they are facing a big amount of health problems.
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, by making healthy
food
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 more affordable, governments can encourage
people
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 to eat right.
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