In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishments.

There is an increasing number of juvenile offenders in many countries. Some people claim that under-aged

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participating in major illegal activities should be punished as adults.

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, my firm conviction is

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of

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on age,

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should impose

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by considering the motive for

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. Imposing adult

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on teenage

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who commit major

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contribute

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greatly to

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offender rate reduction. Harsh sanctions, which

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fit the

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, could deter other adolescents from engaging

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activities. They may think twice before turning to a career

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because of the fear of severe

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.

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,

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criminal rate could decrease. A perfect instance

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is Le Van Luyen, who was

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under-eighteen premeditated murderer and burglar in Vietnam,

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capital

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. And a long time span after that, there were very few major

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committed by teenagers.

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, teenage is a sophisticated and sensitive age, which needs sympathy and tactful treatment. Several adolescents have to receive unpremeditated murder prison

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due to their protection against

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abuse. Numerous unprivileged kids around the globe chose to be rule-breakers as a way of making a living. The rate of children committing minor

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such

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as shoplifting or

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pick pocketing

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for the purpose of getting food and money to survive is soaring every single day. These illegal activities enforce serious consequences in their development of conscience and lead to worse and major

crimes

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like burglary or drug trafficking in order to earn easy money.

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,

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this kind

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these kinds

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of teenage

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criminals

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criminal

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should be put on probation and provided education and vocational training

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of being imprisoned as adult

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. In conclusion, under-aged

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have to receive the

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fit to the

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.

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on the motive for

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, the sanctions can be harsh and severe

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adult

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or can be a

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treatment and provide basic skills to ensure they will be normal and valuable people in the future.