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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why someone should learn a foreign language.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
These days, more and more
people
 starting to learn foreign
languages
. While some
people
 believe that the only benefit
in
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 learning it is to be able to
travel
 to or
work
 in a foreign
country
, others prefer to say that there are more reasons why someone should learn a foreign
language
. It is certainly true that for the majority of
people
 the basic advantage of knowing
other
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language
 is to be able to
travel
. While nowadays
traveling
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 become more and more popular, knowing of
foreign
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language
 can make it more affordable. No matter how long or how far away you want to
travel
, knowing the
language
 of your destination
country
 will increase your confidence and help
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 to
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 in the new
country
.
Otherwise
, coming to
other
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country
 could become
a
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torture without basic knowledge of
it’s
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 native
language
. The
second
 most popular reason to learn foreign
languages
 is to
work
 in a foreign
country
.
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no
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 doubt companies looking for candidates with
a
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good hard skills and high education level but a line in a resume about knowledge
in
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 foreign
languages
 can make you more valuable and help you to excel among
the
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others.
However
, there are so many other benefits of learning foreign
languages
.
Firstly
, the
language
 of every
country
 not only help
people
 to communicate with each other but store and guard
it’s
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 culture. So by learning
new
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a new
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language
 we not only start to understand foreigners but discover all secrets and nuances of different cultures.
Secondly
, it is not a secret that a significant part of
world’s
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 classic works of literature or movies was translated
to
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 a lot of
languages
 so everyone can enjoy them. Unfortunately, because of adaptation usually it loses so many nuances of the original
work
.
That is
 why knowing the
language
 of the original
work
 gives you the
benefits
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to
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 better
understand
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 the original author’s ideas.
Therefore
, I believe that learning new
languages
 can not only be helpful in your resume or when you go to
travel
 but
also
 help in
deeper
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 understanding of different cultures.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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