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Some people think that employers should not be concerned about how employees dress at work, but the quality of work only. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Employers should be allowed to wear comfortable
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 to
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, as
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 has a huge impact on labour productivity.
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, some
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 tend to think that it is unacceptable to come to
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 not in classic
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 because it does not look appropriate for a prestigious company and it will
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 make you sleepy, because the
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 are very comfortable and comfortable, which
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 can reduce the efficiency of the company. The very essence of having business attire and the fundamental emergence of professional dressing is to invoke a
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 of uniformity and constancy among all. The incidents of
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 forming opinions and at times getting engrossed in chatting about one’s choice of outfit is rife and has been time and again seen denigrating one and making them rate low on self-esteem.
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 causes mental fatigue in an individual trying to match up with a standardized dressing norm.
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, in
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 process, it has been seen how the efficacy of an individual extenuates upon thinking about
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 insignificant and paltry issues.
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 to that, it revitalizes the
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 of belonging among colleagues and employees. An employee is the face of an organization, and how
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 look upon them reflects organizational standards in the minds of
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. Especially, in business meetings, wearing
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 based on comfort might render a
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 of discomfort and trigger an ambience of informality among the employees and the clients as well. Even in business models based on business-to-client modelling, formal wear and having a dress code is quintessential to the reputation of an organization.
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, even from the putative aspect, it is all the more cardinal to have a formal uniform for the employees. Though some might argue that having a typical dress could at times be quite daunting to put up with, in the long run,
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 creates a professional
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 environment without dragging trivial issues like choosing what to wear or if
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 dress is being repeated or not, in the mainstream. Conclusively we may say that having a dressing
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 is mandatory for an efficient
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 environment and having a conducive
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 environment is all that should be a numero uno priority.
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