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The number of children that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years. What are the reasons for this? How can we encourage children to read more?

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It is irrefutable fact that advancements in technology have taken away the interest of students from reading books to onscreen games on a tablet. There are various reasons behind
this
 fact. In
this
 essay, I will shed light on the causes and its solution
thus
 leading to a logical conclusion.
To begin
 with, there are myriad of reasons which will
further
 elaborate the trend but the most preponderant
one
 stems from the fact that today
parents
 are becoming work-alcoholic and due to lack of attention of
parents
, child spend their time on other reliable resources where they can spend time.
For instance
, Facebook, and Instagram is the platform where most teenagers are registered to make a friend and chat with them.
Moreover
, advanced technology is expandable and the availability of the internet at low rates makes younger
one
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ones
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take benefit and spend their recreational activities on video games and prefer to read virtual stories online and through voice-recorded versions.
Hence
 these are the reasons behind the notion and decline in the number of offline readers. Moving to the solutions, there are various ways to divert the attention of the young
one
.
First
 and foremost,
parents
 and teacher should promote their children to follow the habit of offline reading and they should regard the certain followed action. In
this
 way, the little
one
 follows the habit of reading.
Moreover
,
parents
 should restrict the onscreen front of phones and tablets. So, that student child should not follow that trend to be cool in front of friends and other peers. To recapitulate, according to the aforementioned above
one
 can reach the conclusion that the problem of the declined traditional readers is successfully addressed and provided solutions can be followed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proliferation
  • Screen-based entertainment
  • Deprioritizing
  • Storytelling
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Underfunded
  • Affordability
  • Curriculums
  • Foster
  • Digital-native generation
  • Gamify
  • Community-driven
  • Diverse collection
  • Milestones
  • Incentivize
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