Some People say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is true that

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can make a relationship between

people

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all around the world. While some

people

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believe that all ages

people

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together from different cultures by

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program it’s

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concert

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together

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and

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wedding

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a wedding

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concert

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hand, there are clear arguments that

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is a key

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for

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get

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together.

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of the main reasons can be that

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new

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concert

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wonderful

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thing

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enjoy.

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means that current situation whole month all

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have been busy

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their life.They didn't get

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get

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together with other

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that's why it is

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. Another reason can be that it will

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help

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our communication gap each other by attending on

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last

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year

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I went to a

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of nearby my house

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I saw lots of old friends earlier we didn't contact each other,

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doing well for communication.

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valid reason for advocating

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view is that any

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concert

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help

helped

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helps

to our all

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together.

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, I believe that

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a Wedding

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concert

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best

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for

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enjoy

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ourselves as

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well as get together

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because nowadays every family's

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living abroad for higher study and

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others

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people

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psychically. When

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someone

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some

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someone

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one

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arrange

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weeding

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program It's essential for them and

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they can attend in

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stage.

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couple

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of year

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year

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ago was

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of my

cousins

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wedding

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and they organized a

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for

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together,

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before

befor

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before

we didn’t get

a opportunities

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feel that it would

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our relationship with each other. To conclude, In my

opinion

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I strongly believe that

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has some power to make good

relationship

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relationships

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between

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who

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different ages,cultures and nationalities by above

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

310 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
evoke
connect
diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
unifying force

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

Some people believe that overconsumption of fast food is contributing to the global obesity epidemic. What problems are associated with this, and what solutions can be implemented

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