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Topic : Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve. Others believe that individuals also can do some things to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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To conserve the environment, a small attempt can
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 make the change, a more concise example of the butterfly effect factually. The issues hampering nature are not the result of a single day, but rather an accumulation of numerous years and still counting.
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, to say that an individual cannot make any change to improve the situation is not correct, rather the positive effect is bound to happen from a small change incorporated by an individual at the micro level indeed. So, below paragraphs, will find both views and will conclude with my take on the topic.
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, for those who are inclined towards not devoting any effort to increasing environmental health, they must re-consider their ideology and start thinking from a broader perspective which can incorporate cleaning the surroundings, society or locality and on a broader scale, organizing or participating in environmental programmes that are bound to impact the earth for good.
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, a group of people who are in favour of putting small efforts to impact the globe on good terms should continue on
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 path as a small effort is all needed to create a larger impact together.
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 group is the one that tends to organise events which promote saving nature,
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 environment,
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 multiple movements to make the crowd aware of the harmful effects of plastic, and artificial chemicals. An example can be Save Earth NGO which is constantly incorporated towards the benefit of mother earth. So at
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, my take is that effort should be made no matter how small it may be, but has to be done so that you
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 become someone else's motivation to preserve and nurture the ecology and may
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 chain grows.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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