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Buying things on the internet, such asbooks, air ticket and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Buying online has been increasing each day among customers which are in search of convenience and safety. In fact, globalization has boosted online activities and certain
people
 are more confident to spend their cash buying things on the
internet
 than years ago. In my mind,
this
 has been more useful due to benefits
such
 as discounts and the fastest delivery. So, I'm going to discuss it in
this
 essay.
In addition
, globalism has been increasing online store options worldwide and
people
 from many places around the world have been buying products from many countries
such
 as China, America, India and so.
For instance
, in Brazil
people
 usually buy several products through China's websites and applications
such
 as Ali Express and Alibaba where is possible to find millions of products. In fact, there are many benefits and individuals have saved at least 30% comparing buying the same product in their home countries.
Besides
, modern delivery allows customers receive it in at least 10 days. I support that the
internet
 is the present and will evolve more and more.
On the other hand
, some doubts come up and others rather buy at street shopping than buy online.
In other words
, the virtual place is an unknown world for them and they should have at least one experience before judging it. According to my personal experience, my wife always chose to buy things on the street market and
consequently
, she always lost the opportunity to save money.
Moreover
, we had a long conversation about technologies and safety ambients provided by websites
such
 as Amazon, and Mercado Libre, and nowadays at least 50% of her purchase are from buying online. In conclusion, there are several advantages to buying online, and
people
 learned them. In my opinion, comfortable, safe and fast delivery transformed the way to purchase goods on the
internet
,
in addition
, time is money and we are living in an era where
people
 are working around the clock, so the
internet
 has become vital for humanity. On the other point of view,
people
 must take care before buying online and double check the place where they choose to buy something, by the way, bad
people
 exist in any place.
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