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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines.tp what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #ebooks #technology #newspaper #magazines #tp
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 of digitalisation, receiving information is no
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 that e-source and digital devices might
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physical papers. Personally, I deem
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 and books online to complete their tasks or improve
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 without
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teacher
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 in school.
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 to the old offline version, e-learning is absolutely an ascending trend in current educational institutions, and it will
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 children with
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their lives.
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 luggage volume.
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, there seems to be a reason why cultural influences could be one of the
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 for today’s society. A great addition
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 my opinion could be magazines and newspapers are still available even
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adolescents.
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 productive than browsing apps and feeds online, with numerous
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distractions on the screen
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 the original purposes.
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 their friends or family, even themselves could permanently hold them as a
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. To conclude my opinions,
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, books online and sources digitally from the internet
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 to higher population. Unfortunately, losing the news booklet or magazines might not
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 in some other types of
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, specifically
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 the elderly. In summary, it is critical to
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 between the new and the old ways of accessing
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, there is no benefit to
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 either one and I disagree with the fact about
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replacement of
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newspapers
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 and
magazine
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magazines
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 to a large
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