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Some people believe that smoking cigarettes should be banned. On the other hand, there are those who disagree with this measure. Do you agree or disagree with the banning of cigarettes?

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Cigarette smoking is injurious to health. It is often argued by some
people
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 that the intake of tobacco should be banned, whereas, others opine that it is not the best practice to stop
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 from
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 habit.
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, I wonder if it gets banned,
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 it will help
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 in quitting
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 bad habit. In
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 essay, I shall discuss my views.
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, these days it is very common that
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 are smoking
cigarettes
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. Even, there are many places where there are smoking zones so they can go there and do as much as they want without any hesitation. So, basically,
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 places are encouraging the public to smoke.
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, airport lounges have smoking zones, there are many other places too.
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, the only way to discourage
people
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 from smoking is to ban
cigarettes
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 worldwide.
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 will find it difficult for the
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 few days but after that everything would be normal for everyone,
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, there are many advertisements developed to awaken
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 about its disadvantages, but
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 are ignoring those ads as they are addicted to
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 slow poison which is deteriorating their health slowly.
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, on the packet of
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, it is clearly written that smoking is injurious to health.
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, the government should take strict action on banning
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 by imposing penalties on shopkeepers who sell tobacco.
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, the industries that are manufacturing
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 should be banned with immediate effects. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that government should not encourage
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 for smoking by creating separate zones,
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 industries and shopkeepers should be penalized for producing and selling
cigarettes
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