Recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

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dramatically gone up all around the world, especially in

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ratio of unschooled generation, unfortunately.

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tend to leave school before

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high education level.

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to commit a crime to gain money rather than work a regular job. Due to they do not have a bachelor's degree diploma, they do not have

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started to complain about her work. 2 years ago, I

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learnt he had caught while he is stealing money from

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box. So it has resulted in

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On the other hand

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criminal case has increased recently, there

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numerous

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to solve that problem one is should be done

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government

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curriculum. Even if

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such

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or cashier, if they complete

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education on

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side it should

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their salary. To conclude, by increasing the proportion of

people

who are educated, the trending delinquency rate among young

people

can be reduced over time. The biggest responsibility in

this

matter is of course the responsibility of the government.

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Recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

Your opinion

Interest in homeschooling is becoming more widespread around the world. In your opinion, should school be compulsory for all children, or should families be allowed the right to choose to educate their children at home?

THE FOREST AND THE NEED TO PRESERVE IT. WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THAT?

Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible sollutions?