Recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

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among

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adolescents

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dramatically gone up all around the world, especially in

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metropolis. I

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ratio of unschooled generation, unfortunately.

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tend to leave school before

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high education level.

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, they are many uneducated

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around us. That sort of

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people

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prefer

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to commit a crime to gain money rather than work a regular job. Due to they do not have a bachelor's degree diploma, they do not have

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stopped studying

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his senior. He had

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. After a while he

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started to complain about her work. 2 years ago, I

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learnt he had caught while he is stealing money from

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box. So it has resulted in

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criminal case has increased recently, there

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numerous

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to solve that problem one is should be done

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government

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the government

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should be encouraged to study at least their high school education and more with

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curriculum. Even if

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the young

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individual

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desire to work

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does not need

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bachelor

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degree

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such

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as being

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or cashier, if they complete

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education on

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side it should

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their salary. To conclude, by increasing the proportion of

people

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who are educated, the trending delinquency rate among young

people

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can be reduced over time. The biggest responsibility in

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matter is of course the responsibility of the government.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

261 words

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Recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

Your opinion

The best way to remove poverty in developing countries is to provide 6 years of free education to all children. So that they can read, write and use numbers agree or disagree

Many people use social media everyday to get in touch with other people and obtain the news.Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?